Too many info will distract the reader

The story was funny, However there are soooooo many conversations, small Talks, tsukomi included in one page. From the reader standpoint, it's very easy to be distracted from the story. My friend initially cannot understand the story, so I have to read it completely to explain the details to her. The timeline of the story also was not handled well. The good part of the story is Uke is very cute, interesting with a courage of love. But on the contrary, Seme's part was sooooo weak, hope this part could be improved in the future story.